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A population structure with the young is more than the old_Cam 12 test 6 task 2

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    Assignment (Cam 12, test 6, task 2):
    At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relative
    large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
    Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
    Population structure is a topic of intense interest because of its
    inextricable relation to economical and social development, defense
    security. These days, in some nations the young population exceeds the old
    one. I am convinced that this structure brings more pros than cons.
    Concerning the drawbacks of this trend, some selected ones will be
    clarified. To begin with, a substantial number of young people leads to a
    heated need in education, healthcare. It places a pressure on the
    government to expand institutions and schools system, hospitals and clinics
    system to adapt to the above need. To give an instance, twenties-thirties
    age group is the most potential one for reproduction. Consequently, doctors
    and healthcare officers are responsible to train them to protect themselves
    from being pregnant without desire. Next, an enormous proportion of young
    persons results in a harshly competitive labor market. Hence, the
    government must create a great number of job vacancies, unless a high
    criminal rate will follow.
    Nevertheless, the drawbacks as discussed above are eclipsed by the
    benefits. Firstly, young people are the central pillar of our labor force
    who generate the majority of added value for our society. They are smart
    and well-educated enough to learn, apply or innovate modern technologies.
    As the result of these, they can take the present production, business to a
    higher level of productivity, profit. For example, BKAV is a well-known
    Vietnamese antivirus software designed by a group of young lecturers and
    students of Hanoi Technology University. This product is so useful for
    protecting database from hack, loss. Secondly, young persons play the main
    role in safeguarding national security from damage activities, war because
    of their strengths and cleverness. They do not present only in army but
    also in residential areas. For instance, each district has a division of
    soldiers to ensure its own safety and economy.
    In conclusion, a young population structure has more positive impacts than
    negative ones. Therefore, the government should point out the strategies to
    take advantage of the merits and well control the demerits.

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    [1/31/2018, 2:40:57 PM] Cám ơn các bạn!

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