[khuyến]

Topic: The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first
chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows
how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.

Essay:
The bar chart depicts the percentages of rationales for studying of adults. The pie chart illustrates the proportions of adult education cost that Taxpayer, employer, individual should pay.
Overall, interesting in subject and gaining qualifications are two main reasons adult people want to study. People also think individual and employer should pay the major parts of studying cost for adults.
According to the bar chart, the percentages of interesting in subject and gaining qualifications when mature people decide to study are approximately 10% each. By contrast, about 9% and 11% of adult people study because of being able to change jobs and meeting people respectively. The other purposes adults decide to study including being helpful for current job, improving prospect and promotion, enjoying learning/studying are seen around 20%.
Looking at the pie chart, people think the studying tuition fee should be paid most by individual with 40% and employer with 35%. The figure for Taxpayer in term of studying cost for adults is 25%.

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[10:21:06, 22/8/2017] Cám ơn các bạn!

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Hi bạn!

cảm ơn bạn đã revise bài cho mình.

Mình có thắc mắc là: ở một số câu có mệnh đề quan hệ mình lược bỏ trạng từ quan hệ cũng tính là lỗi ngữ pháp. Mình nghĩ lược bỏ được chứ
ví dụ câu:
interesting in subject and gaining qualifications are two main reasons (bỏ why) adult people want to study
hoặc câu:
The other purposes (bỏ that) adults decide to study including being helpful for current job, improving prospect and promotion, enjoying learning/studying are seen around 20%.