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Bar chart- Dạng so sánh 2 đối tượng

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    The bar chart illustrates the most popular sports played by American in 2008. It is clearly seen that while netball was the most favourite sport for female, male liked playing soccer for the most. In contrast, the opposite was true for cricket in women and netball in men. Additionally, the biggest difference happened in both genders was netball.
    It is clearly seen that, approximately 25% of males playing soccer while only 5% of females choosing this sport. Similarity, the percentage of men choosing cricket stood at 10%, 5 times as much as that of women selecting ones. In addition, the figure for male playing other doubled women average (at 20% and 10% respectively).
    On the contrary, the vast majority of netball players were female, accounting for 25%, whereas, the figure for male only made up 2%. Likewise, there was a gap between male and female when choosing swimming like a sport, at around 14% and 23% respectively. However, the proportion of tennis and basketball was quite similarity for both genders, at approximately 6-7%. Likewise, jogging was the less common sports for both sexes, at only 3%.
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    Kindly check!

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    Chào bạn, đề bài bạn copy trong file word không giống với bài viết của bạn, do đó bạn kiểm tra lại và upload lại file word ở đây nhé. Mình sẽ chấm lại bài này giúp cho bạn. Cảm ơn bạn rất nhiều.

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