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cause and solution essay of July 6

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    Topic: Fewer and fewer people walk on a daily basis. What are the reasons and how to encourage them to spend their time walking?

    In recent decades, the number of people walking in their daily life has decreased significantly across many nations worldwide. There are several reasons behind this tendency, but some fundamental solutions could be taken by both the government and individuals to tackle this issue.

    Some reasons can be seen tangibly for the issue of fewer people spending their time to travel by their feet each day. First, the predominant factor resulting in this trend is the tremendous alteration in people’s lifestyle as the consequence of modern life. Today’s working has been becoming more and more demanding, which requires citizens have to work stressfully and follow a high schedule, thus, to save their time as much as they can, they will surely choose to commute by cars, bus or train in order to travel to work earlier. The second culprit of that trend may be the state-of-the-art technology. It is the fact that more and more people from all ages are now addicted to their mobile phones, which allows them to spend the retire leisure time to reach their friends, relatives, or colleagues via Facebook or Instagram, lead them to an inactiveness lifestyle.
    Luckily, some feasible measures can be taken by both the national authorities and the public to address this issue efficiently. The first potential way is that the government should invest more in the infrastructure, suggesting more practices of walking day by day. An illustration for this is that, in Tokyo, Japan, by proving different kinds of underground transportation, has resulted in raising the number of people commuting to works by them, and they will walk a lot from their house to the station or for the transits. This solution also helps to minimize the figures for private vehicles and contribute considerably to protect the environment. Another solution should be for the individuals. A sports group in which people can play sports together, is an excellent ideal for one rarely do physical activities, as the peer pressure might help them to be me consistent, causing a form of new healthy habit.
    In brief, although some main causes have been contributing to the issue of less and less walking among people, some practical ways for both the local council and citizens can be carried out to deal with that.

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  • #223228

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    [22:14:30, 6/7/2018] Cám ơn các bạn!

  • #223492

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    [21:18:53, 8/7/2018] Cám ơn các bạn!

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  • #223582

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    Bạn xem lại hộ mình với. 7,7 6,6 thì overall là 6.5 hay 6.0. Thanks bạn. Tớ sắp thi tự dưng viết lại bị giảm điểm. Hic

    • #223678

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      Hi bạn

      Cách chấm điểm chính thức theo hướng dẫn của British Council cũng như IDP là điểm của các kĩ năng riêng sẽ làm tròn xuống. Nghĩa là 6.5 hay 6.75 sẽ bị chấm xuống thành 6.0. Tuy nhiên để bù cho sự thiệt thòi này thì điểm overall cuối cùng tổng 4 kĩ năng sẽ được làm tròn lên. Ví dụ như overall bạn được 7.25 thì sẽ thành 7.5 nha.

      Cảm ơn bạn và chúc bạn chuẩn bị kĩ càng nhất cho kì thi IELTS sắp tới nha!

      Kind regards

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  • #224506

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    Cảm ơn bạn. Nhưng hình như bạn nhầm sao đó. Cái đó chỉ để tính điểm tổng giữa task 1 và task 2 sẽ bị làm tròn xuống, ví dụ điểm tổng 2 tasks là 6.75 thì xuống 6.5, nhưng nếu tổng điểm trong 1 task như bài viết này là 7,7,6,6, thì điểm overall bài đó là 6.5 chứ bạn nhỉ. Thanks

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