[Phung Nhu Thao]

The chart shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000

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Hi there
It can be seen that your rating was 2 stars, which I may consider my work ineffective and that you are not satisfied. I would aways be open to any feedback to improve my service towards learners like you. Please leave a comment regarding what should be improved better in my corrected essay for you.
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[Phung Nhu Thao]

Yeah, there are 2 mistakes that I can see in your corrected essays.
First, I did not lack of introduction, but my introduction is not good. It is better if you can revised it and improve it. Furthermore, I do not think I need to say which country has the highest rate or the lowest since it is not necessary in the introduction.
Second, male and female are countable noun so you must correct my essay by adding (s)

Please reply if you have any questions.
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Thao

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Hi there
Thank you very much for your comments!
I have taken your feedbacks into consideration and revised my correction accordingly. I hope you will have a look at the amended version and feel free to ask if you have any inquiry!
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[Phung Nhu Thao]

Hi,
Thank you so much. ^_^