• Chữa bài IELTS Task 2

    • thanhme8

      Participant
      October 4, 2017 at 9:45 pm

      More and more people want to own famous brands of cars, clothes and other items. What are the reasons for this? Is this a negative or positive trend?
      In recent years, there has been a growing number of people who want to have well-known brands. This is attributable to several reasons, and I believe it is a negative trend.
      To begin with, there are several factors that lead to the situation in which a significantly increasing number of people have a desire to own famous products. One of those factors is that high-end goods are usually associated with a symbol of status. As a result, people are willing to splurge on expensive items, which helps them not only increase a sense of confidence but also pave the way to show off their wealth and individuality. Additionally, since individuals nowadays place more emphasis on the quality of merchandise, brand-named products are able to meet their demand, which contributes considerably to customers’ satisfaction. For instance, upper-class products such as Rolex watches or Louis Vuitton handbags are usually made by high-skilled craftsmen and of excellent materials, which allows the owners to enjoy using these items for many years without paying money for repairs.
      I believe that this tren can be negative because of some reasons. First, due to peer pressure, juvenile people who are born into low-income families are more likely to develop the habit of pestering their parents for things which may be equal to three times of average monthly salaries. This means that there would be a higher risk of their family’s secure financial future. Second, because poverty may not have a chance to own these products, the poor might turn to crimes such as drug trafficking or violent attacks on others to purchase high-end items. This would have a variety of negative impacts on society as there would be rising crime rates.
      In conclusion, there are a number of reasons why individuals these days want to own luxurious brands of material items, and I am convinced that this trend can result in some drawbacks.

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    • Oanh Nguyen

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      October 5, 2017 at 4:44 pm

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