Chữa bài IELTS Task 1

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The bar chart below shows the results of a survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on two groups of workers: those aged from 18-30 and those aged 45-60, and shows factors affecting their work performance.

The bar chart compares the rate of variable aspects that influence the employee’s work performance in term of two group ages: from 18-30 and 45- 60. The survey was conducted by a personel department.
Overall, it is clear that while self-promotion opportunities and comfortable working environment are the most vital considerations for workers in the group age from 18-30, the older tends to less focus on these factor. However, the salary and competent boss attract special importance to both two age groups.
It can be seen that there is a significant difference in the result of personal development opportunities between two age groups. The work performance of younger worker depend mostly on this factor, at more than 80%, which is as twice as that of older group. Similarly, relaxed working environment factor account for nearly 75% affecting the result of people in 18-30, compared to only 35% for that of the elderly. Other considerable gaps have been observed in the promotion prospect and job security, which both are affected more by young workers.
On the other hand, other aspects share the same result in both two age groups. In term of salary, both show nearly the same proportion at 75%. Similar results have been witnessed in team spirit at 70%, and in work environment at only 30%