Chữa bài IELTS Task 2

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Đề Nowadays, people can carry out task such as shopping and banking even business transaction without meeting each others face to face. What are effect on individuals and society?
Bài làm
The method of business transaction has been a profound topic nowadays. Despite not meeting directly, they could do shopping or banking through technology. This essay aims to elaborate on both advantages and disadvantages of this problem.
On the one hand, there are two principal benefits of bussiness with modern devices. First of all, technology helps people to enjoy the convenience of commercial activities. This is due to the fact that they can lie on their bed in their rooms with air-conditionings while letting their fingers do the shopping. Secondly, discussing for contacts on the Internet is such a prompt process that businessmans can spend that spare time on research or marketing. It is pretty vital for people who are busy with their hard schedule to avoid wasting time for meeting.
On the other hand, it is also obvious that trade on the Internet may lead to many risks. First, it is quite possible that they loss their bank accounts from swindle websites. If this issue is underappreciated by bussinessmans, the effect is likely to occur and then, money that they loss is very difficult to refund because of the flexibility of those cyber-robbers. Additionally, buying products on the Internet means that people ignore the risks of inferior items such as old clothes, outdated food,… and they can not be refunded their money.
In conclusion, whereas trade with technology has many benefits, people must be careful with some risks it causes.