Chữa bài IELTS Task 1

The charts below show that what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts illustrate destination of graduates and postgraduates in the United Kingdom other than full-time job after graduating from universities in the year 2008.
It is clear that the trend of both graduates and postgraduates went to four different categories were similar to in 2008. There are very few students chased voluntary work after leaving college, whereas the number of students who intended to pursue further study accounted for the highest figure.
The figure for graduates chased further study was 29,665 people, while only 2,725 postgraduate students were willing to do this. In contrast, there was 3,500 graduate students tended to purse voluntary work, compared to 345 graduations in 2008.
The destination of students who went to part-time work accounted for 17,735 graduates and 2,535 postgraduates at that time. The number of graduates would be unemployment was ten times the figure for postgraduates at 16,235 and 1,625 people respectively.