[Ha Nguyen]

Topic: Cam 3 test 4
The line graph compares the changing of unemployment rates in the America and Japan from March 1993 to March 1999.

Overall, the unemployment rates of the US and Japan changes in the contrast trend during this period. In the similar period, the US unemployment rate declined. Meanwhile, there was a growth trend in Japan.

Starting from March 1993, there was a significant drop in unemployment rates in the America during the six months later, it went from 7% to nearly 6.3% in this period. In the following 3 years, staring from 1994, the rates fluctuated between 6.5% and 6% before dropping to nearly 5% by the year 1997. Throughout the remainder of the period, the unemployment rates were slightly variation at 5%.
Over the same period, the unemployment rates in Japan were in a contrast trend comparing to the US. This rates rise exponentially from 2.5% to 3% during 1992, after this year, the number of unemployed increased slightly and reach the highest point, 5.3%. Then, it dropped slightly around 5% by the year 1999.

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[lanh]

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If you have any concerns, feel free to leave them in the comments.
Lanh.

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[Ha Nguyen]

Thanks. But I feel struggling in writing what should I do ?About the “significant” and ” exponential” you said 0.7% was not a significant number, but I mean for the unemployment rates. It is not a small number. You can see it on the graph as well. Anyway, thanks for that. :)

[lanh]

Dear Ha Nguyen,
1. If you want to class a number as “significant” or “exponential”, you have to compare it with the total. More than 25% of the total is significant I suppose.
2. Anyone stucks at writing before he masters it. Don’t panic. Learn one thing at a time. I suggest:
– Learn how to write. You need to know how to do before actually doing.
– Practice as much as possible. The first one might be a mess, but you will be gradually better.
– You need to have someone revised your writing. Learn from your mistakes.
– Enjoy the process no matter what.
That’s all.
Lanh.