[ducluong1410]

One thought of school is that insteading of budgetting for curing illnesses, government should focus financial resources on shaping a healthy lifestyle among citizens to prevent health issues. From my perspective, I object to this idea because both treatment and prevention are equally important.
On the one hand, futher investment in simulating physical activities and eradicating alcohol culture is crucial to reduce potential threat of serious ailments. First and foremost, the world has been witnessing an increasing number of cases of obesity and heart diseases which is allegedly under influence of sedentary lifestyle. Therefore, it is necessary for authorities to construct more communial facilities such as public playgrounds and gardens with the aim to encourage people to attend outdoor activities. Furthermore, it goes without saying that the popular habit of drinking beer or wine, in Vietnam for example, is the culprit of a myriad of traffic accidents and cancers. Vietnamese government, hence, has to grant extra fundings to propagation campaigns to change people’s perception of drinking culture and tightening management of consumption of alcoholic liquor.
On the other hand, an equal concentration of money is essentially required to build extra medical infrastructure and research for more advanced medication. To commence with, apart from diseases associated with unhealthy style of living, human beings are afflicted with innate disorders, natural epidemics like H5N1 or Ebola and accidental injuries. To be equally important, thousands of people have diagnosed with not only the century illness namely AIDS but also many kinds of cancers which have no or little effective remedies. By virtue of that, only with a significant amount of money spent on improving health care service; establishing hospitals and clinics; and discovering new cures can government provide more medical access to patients and guarantee the well-being of human society.
By way of conclusion, owning to aforementioned arguments, I am of the opinion that government should allocate equal money to both curing and encouraging healthy lifestyle.

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[mainganha310]

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