[Phương]

Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football. While other people think that taking part in individual sports is better, like tennis or swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There is a considerable debate over whether or not everyone should take part in sports requiring cooperation such as football. Some people strongly believe that individual sports bring about various benefits rather than ones such as football. In my judgement, I am in favour of the former viewpoint.
It has been scientifically proven that many people will be better than one at solving problems, even if that one is the smartest person in that field. Playing sports in teams helps people making an improvement on developing the skill of teamwork, which plays a significant role in maintaining long-term growth. For example, if a student got used to playing sports with his partners, he will be able to work effectively with other people as a team. Further, he also knows how to negotiate with his colleagues to reach the agreement. This is likely to lead to high levels of productivity in projects he joins. In addition, getting on well with others would assist him to gain remarkable performance at the university, which students have been required to work as a team to solve problems. If he is not familiar with such thing, he is immediately isolated himself from the others.
Furthermore, taking part in sports demanding cooperation is an appropriate way to be aware of the strength and weakness of a person. Individual sports could not bring about such benefits. For instance, one has a golden opportunity to request their partners to judge how to play in a particular match. However, the majority of people often find it difficult to increase their level when playing individual sports.
In conclusion, the participation in football team is positively influential in developing necessary skill such as teamwork. In a nutshell, people would make a personal development through others’ assessment. Therefore, above all these advantages, I prefer playing sports in a team to individual sport.

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[Phương]

Dear Truong,
I have some questions as followed:
W73: Can you five me a better writing?
W75: I mean that “one person get use to doing sth for a long time”
W76: Yes, but using “further” is not exactly?
W79: Defines for University where students are required to work as a team
W712: Can you suggest another example?
Thanks.

[truongminhtri210595]

Dear Phương,
Sorry for the late reply. Here are my answers according to your previous requests

1/ You can add “On the one hand”
2/ In this case, you should use simple present tense because that is the correct structure for the clause here
3/ The correct term here should be Furthermore
4/ For this case, it should be “in which students have been required…”
5/ My suggestion is “upon playing in a team, players are more able to realize their good traits through the collaboration with other members”

[truongminhtri210595]

Dear Phương,
Sorry for the late reply. Here are my answers according to your previous requests

1/ You can add “On the one hand”
2/ In this case, you should use simple present tense because that is the correct structure for the clause here
3/ The correct term here should be Furthermore
4/ For this case, it should be “in which students have been required…”
5/ My suggestion is “upon playing in a team, players are more able to realize their good traits through the collaboration with other members”