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Task 2:

Some people say that subjects like arts, music, drama and creative writing are more beneficial to children and therefore they need more of these subjects to be included in the timetable. Do you agree or disagree?

In the past, the main subjects are always logical and critical subjects such as Mathematics, Science, Biology and so on. However, nowadays, people have changed their mind based on the changes of the world. While some people think the main subjects are still beneficial, I believe that arts, music, drama and creative writing are more advantageous for children in today’s world.

On the one hand, the substantial subjects are really necessary in our daily life. As can be seen clearly that if we want to better evaluate their ideals, various claims and argument that we encounter, we need a better understanding of basic logic and process of critical thinking. Moreover, introducing Maths to children from an early age helps to develop their understanding of all elements of problem solving and reasoning in a broad range of contexts and measuring skills.

However, children should have arts, music, drama and creative writing be included in their timetable instead spending too much time studying those which are more difficult. If children do not like to study kind of boring and logically thinking subjects, these artistic ones can help them to blow off their steam. What’s more, students who is good at music, they can also be good at Maths and creative writing can help children improve more their writing and communication skills. Hence, these subjects can bring children innovation in learning the other subjects effectively.

Overall, besides learning the original and critical subjects, children need time to relax and develop the other skills which are also essential in the daily life.

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Overall, your essay is good with no mistakes in spelling, but there are still some repeating words, phrases, a lot of common words and errors with grammar structures. Some of your ideas don’t focus on the requirements. To improve, you should focus on the vocabulary and how to use them properly. Also, you should be careful when using complex grammar structures and re-check after finishing the essay to make sure your sentences are clear.

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