[ntmtd2006]

What kinds of people become famous these days?
Is this different from the kind of achievement that made people famous in the past? In what way?
How do you think people will become famous in the future?
What are the good things about being famous? Are there any disadvantages?
Why do you think ordinary people are interested in the lives of celebrities?
Some professional athletes are very well-paid. Do you think they deserve to be so well-paid?
Compare how people become celebrities today with how people became celebrities years ago, for example, 30 or 50 years ago.

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[Huong Trang]

Band score: 5.5 -6.0
Overall, you have acceptable answer for most questions. The best answers are of those last questions. In terms of pronunciation, you pronounce most words clearly enough, but some words are difficult to hear. You pause at inappropriate places, which may break the sentences and the meaning of them. You need to raise or fall your voice, instead of using a monotonous voice to answer every question.
1. Fluency and Coherence
– Question 1: You list two types of people to answer the question, which is on the point. However, working towards success without desire to become well-known: this idea may be not reasonable as usually success is attached with being known by others, especially after you mention some jobs such as artists.  working to benefit the society without desire to become well known.
-Question 2: you can talk about what type of people famous in the past. However, when explaining about the present day, you express quite confusing idea (fame has become more cultural interest. You should change the idea to make it more contradictory to the situation in the apst.  more people have access to mass media, so it is easier for those who appear frequently in TV or internet to become famous even though they do not make any significant contribution.
-Question 3: you should connect the sentences with linking words. “athletes and performers will become famous. At the same time, politician will also…”. Moreover, the question asks you how, but you focus too much on the people who will be famous. Instead you can mention how, for example, some seek for scandals to become known by others while others will simply be well known for their actual achievement.
– Question 5: do not ends with an example, remember to add a concluding sentence. Therefore, generous salary for those sportspeople is reasonable.
2. Grammatical range and accuracy
Question 1:
– dedication to contributing to civilization  dedication to contribute to …: after “to” you need to use bare infinitive.
– Who often are celebrity  who are often celebrity: adverb stands after “be”
– … who are celebrity in the entertainment industry or politician…. :You need to connect the words when you listing using “and”, “or”
– although becoming famous overnight: this part does not link with any clause before it. Moreover, although needs to go with a clause, not v-ing. It is better to omit this phrase instead.
Question 2:
– when compared to the past, there were more political and military leader: as you use the phrase “when compared to the past”, the next clause should be about the present. However, in your sentence, you still talk about the past. Therefore this structure is confusingly used.  while in the past, there were more political and military leaders…., these days….
Question 4:
– without having a lot of people follow  following: follow is not the main verb of the sentence, so you need to use reduced relative clause.
– have camera in your face  have camera pointing at your face
– being famous isolate you from the real world  isolates: make sure you pronounce the final sound clearly, or else it is not correct in grammar.
Question 5
– concerning about their idol will automatically goes away/ disappears
3. Lexical resource
Question 1:
– two kinds of fame that are consistent with two kinds of people  … that are connected with two kinds…: consistent means keeping the same way of doing sth over time, so it is not suitable in your sentence.
– they are usually scientists, artists or soldier…  their professions may vary from scientists, artists to soldiers: you can change the structure so that more academic words can be used.
– You have some good words such as publicity seeking people
Question 2:
– more public profession  more popular profession: public means common or shared, however, the meaning is not suitable in the context.
Question 3:
– Avoid repetition in vocabulary: politician will also always be famous because…  politicians are still able to maintain their popularity
Question 4:
– will become common knowledge for everyone  will become topic of discussion for everyone: knowledge is something you can learn, personal life of famous people cannot be considered as knowledge.
4. Pronunciation
You need to add intonation to your talk. In the recording, you are using a monotonous voice without falling or raising intonation.
– The first type is … people: the word you use here is very hard to hear.
– Something: this word is quite basic, you should make sure that you pronounce it clear enough.
– You need to avoid pauses in inappropriate places such as in the middle of a name (Taylor Swift) or some phrases as well. Pause in the correct place instead.  You can never go/ anywhere in public/ without having/ lots of people follow.