[Anh]

The table below shows the cinema viewing figures for films by country, in millions.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Cinema viewing figures for films by country, in millions
Action Romance Comedy Horror Totals
India 8 7.5 6.5 2.5 24.5
Ireland 7.6 3.8 5.5 6.4 23.3
New Zealand 7.2 4.5 3.9 4.7 20.3
Japan 7.1 4.5 4 2.2 17.8
Total 29.9 20.3 19.9 15.8

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[lanh]

Please see the attached file for your correction.
If you have any concerns, feel free to leave them in the comments.
Lanh.

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[Anh]

Thank you Lanh! However, in the correction, you suggested me to use short expressions like “Overall” instead of mine ” looking at … from overall perspective”, which i was recommended by a teacher because it is quite rare and can gain higher mark. Should I completely get rid of it?

[lanh]

Dear Anh,
It’s just a matter of choice. Both expressions are correct but I prefer using the shorter one. You can see that in many samples, they are all in the short and simple way. Besides, marks are based on band description, which includes “uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation”, “not rare”.