[Vuong Minh]

Help me edit this essay. Im going to sit an exam on 28/9/2019

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20/6/2019: The government should invest money in teaching science rather than in other subjects for a country’s development and progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is clear that the recent date on whether the sate budgets should be allocated on teaching sciene – related subjects instead of other fields does not seem to come to an end any time soon. Although a country may reap many benefits from this policy, I would contend that other subjects should not be neglected.
On the one hand, it is undoubtedly believed that putting an emphasis on scientific subjects contributes significantly to the prosperity of a nation. First, scientific breakthroughs which enhance our living standards in many fields such as food production, healthcare and communication heavily depend on the knowledge of mathematics, physics and chemistry. For example, in term of medicine, via the innovation of a chemical substance extracted from an organism, the scientists invented the measles vaccin, curing thounsands of people contracted this disease. This success would not be done without in-depth knowledge in chemistry. Second, the scienctific subjects require students problem-solving skills and sensible thinking, help them boost their imagination and creativity. Such capabilities are of paramount importance to the children to become experts in many areas, contributing to an intellectual workfore to their countries.
On the other hand, from my perspective, other non-science subjects should not be underestimated. The primary reason is that excessive focus on the education of science makes the children disregard other subjects, leading to the incomprehensive development. In fact, literature, philosopy, history and art are dispensable parts in the process to become a well- rounded person. Moreover, under today’s context of globalisation and international integration, the use of common and universal languages helps people remove language barriers and engage in trade activites. Therefore foreign language should be compulsory in school’s curriculum. Another significant rationale is that little attention on other subjects may create imbalances in the distribution of workfore. This means that when people think that other domains received inadequate funding from the government, it means that these fields are impractical or not useful and they are not likely to pursue these jobs in the future. This, in the long run, leads to the shortage of labour working in non – scientific fields and may cause detrimental effects to the society.
In conclusion, while science subjects are of great importance to both the development of a student and a country, it seems to me that this should not be the only priority and other subjects also need equally sufficient investment.
( 390 words)

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