Chữa bài IELTS Task 2
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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people complain why we need to pay billions dollar every year in order to conserve wildlife as they do have any use value. I strongly disagree this viewpoint.
From my perspective, human beings are destroying the environment and nature so terribly that wild animals have no shelter to exist. And the gradual disappearance has serious influences on eco-system. Even if a single wildlife species gets extinct from the eco-system, it may disturb the whole food chain ultimately leading to disastrous results. Consider a simple example of a bee that is vital for growth of certain crops due to their pollen carrying roles. If bees get reduced in number, the amount of food crops would definitely lower owing to lack of pollination. So poaching and hunting of animals would cause adverse effects on ecological balance.
In addition, nature resources always provide us variety of benefits, therefore the investment for saving wildlife never is wasting. Firstly, these are the invaluable materials for producing medicines. Today, various species of animals are being researched to find cures to deadly diseases like cancers, Alzheimer and Parkinson. Secondly, wildlife also plays an important role in encouraging the economy of the country thanks to huge income from ecotourism. Singapore is one such great example where government maintain the wildlife to promote tourism in their country.
In conclusion, I absolutely disagree with some people who do not appreciate the importance of preserving wild animals. I suppose that the government of each country needs to enforce the laws to save wildlife before too late.This is your corrected essay. Don’t hesitate to ask me if you have any questions.
Thank you!
Cảm ơn bạn đã chữa bài cho mình, mình có một chút thăc mắc
-” If bees get reduced in number, the amount of food crops would definitely lower owing to lack of pollination” bạn nói rằng mình nên đổi if -> Thanks to nhưng mình nghĩ câu này có ý nghĩa tiêu cực nên mình k dùng Thanks to
Cảm ơn bạn!Hi bạn,
Bạn ơi bạn nhìn nhầm phần comment rồi, mình comment chỗ “thanks to” là thay thế cho từ “due to” trong câu này nhé: Consider a simple example of a bee that is vital for growth of certain crops due to their pollen carrying roles. Còn vế câu “If bees get reduced in number” mình suggest 1 cách viết khác là: “If there is a reduction in the number of bees”
Để tránh nhầm lẫn bạn di chuột vào phần chữ bôi trong bài sẽ hiện lên comment nhé^^
Cảm ơn bạn.
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