Chữa bài IELTS Task 2
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TOPIC: Some people believe that money brings happiness; others are of the opinion that having too much money is a problem. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Today’s reccent years in when people even require more about the meeting demand and quality of life, they always study as well as work hard to succeed. Most of them think that wealth would hold a lot of money and they would not be worry about privation and disease .
In fact, Human being expect the having good habitat consist of modern equipment and highly standard of living. Except when they sleep, they use minority of time for working. Young people also try to study and then take a certain career just to achieve their own goals by which they could make self-service. The life look like the exchange. In this environment, People deal their own residual commodities into the necessary stuffs. Specificly, They swap the things available having to money and countinue to consume this purse to buy the other materials likely and take care of them individual. Others earn the living by working of brain Richness do not only make them pleasure but also indicate their level in social. In modern times, Most people think that rich person commonly get the fame and respect of everyone
However, People who have too much money also confont some issues. For example, They will become the aim of thieves and badits. Therefore, they do not dare to go out lonely but rent the securities for protecting. Rich person is obsessed or by the harmful ingredient and feel unsafe. This reason make them always alert and create the distance with the other people. In addition, The toff do not have any time for taking care of family. Everything is even exchanged into the money such as the time, the loving,etc
Overall, Actually, money brings the happiness and luckiness to each individual. People must know the ways of earning and using the money in rightmình đã chữa bài bạn xem kĩ và hỏi lại nêu thắc mắc nhé. Bạn ấn vào từng comment để xem rõ hơn nhé
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