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The diagram illustrates how life cycle of the honey bee

There are five main stages in the process of life of the honey bee, beginning with eggs hatch after 9 – 10 days and ending with females 1 or 2 eggs every three day.

The first step in the process is eggs was broken by nymph after 9 – 10 days. The second step in the process in Nymph changes the skin and grown 3 times, respectively 5 days, 7 days and 9 days.

Subsequent steps, honey bee become young adult, it spends exactly 4 days to maturity. The final step in the process is female honey lay 1 or 2 eggs every three days, after a total of 30 to 31 days from the start of the cycle. From the final step, the eggs need 9 – 10 days to break by nymph which is the first step of life cycle. Totally, the life of honey bee around 34 – 39 days.

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