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Topic: In the future, it seems more difficult to live on the Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planet to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is indeed true that terrestrial life is increasingly become harsh for people on the globe. While I understand that it is essential to tackle such malady, I disagree that more financial resources should be allocated to space study on finding new suitable home.
On the one hand, there is wide range of factors which attributable to unsustainable living condition on the Earth. Firstly, with the accelerating rate of birth, people are facing the shortage of land and accommodation. For example, Hanoi with high population density is enormous pressure of providing apartments for all citizens, especially those with salary below income standard. Secondly, people are uncontrolled harness natural resources for human demanding, which results in the depletion of finite energy. For instance, researcher has shown that by 2025, water resources are running out which will cause 1.8 billion in the conditions of no drinking water.
On the other hand, expenditure spent on universe research searching for new habitable environment to some extent is waste of money. Each year, a vast amount of money would be required for sustain such research; however there is no guarantee of success. In contrast, the much better solution would be that more financial resources should be allocated to develop environmental projects as well as enhance people’s intellectual on the importance of natural resources. For example, thanks to robust technology, green energy has been exploded which gradually replaces the independence on fossil fuel. As a consequence, this would lead to reduce carbon emission, slow down climate change and in turns converting our earth into worth living places.
In conclusion, I believe that people should give a low priority on the space study to find new environment to settle down but investing more money to improve the living conditions in the world.

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