Chữa bài IELTS Task 1
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The graphs give information about the amount of electricity production produced by using different sources in France and Australia over two separate years.
It is clear that the total of electricity production increased dramatically from 1980 to 2000 in both two countries. It is also noticeable that the overall of electricity produced in two nations was the same, but there were considerable differences in fuel sources generated electricity.
in Australian, coal was a key component to producing electricity, accounted for 50% of total fuel sources in 1980 and this figure rose sharply to 130 out of 179 units in 2000. By contrast, in France, the most important fuel to create electricity was nuclear power, producing almost 75% of the country’s electricity in 2000.
While, the amount of electricity produced by hydropower in Australia, increased from 26 units in 1980 to 36 units in 1980, the number of France decreased from 5 units in 1980 to 2 units in 2000. Oil remained a relatively important fuel source over two years in France, but the number of Australia fell from 10 units in 1980 to 2 units in 1900. Both nations used a fewer number of natural gas in 1980 than in 2000Các bạn quên attach bài rồi nè !
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Nhưng mình có một chút thắc mắc như sau
1. Graph sao không dùng được ?
2. over two separate years. (mình thấy simon dùng vậy mà)
3. Lỗi thứ 5 sao lại phải chỉnh lại nhỉ (vì nó giống y hệt lỗi số 8 í)Hi there,
Thanks for your feedback. Regarding your question, please see below:
1. According to OALD, GRAPH describes ‘a planned drawing, consisting of A LINE OR LINES, showing how two or more sets of numbers are related to each other’.
Although a GRAPH is used every now and then to paraphrase a CHART or a DIAGRAM , it is my suggestion that you use the word with its correct meaning.2. It is okay to use the phrase. Yet it is the norm to use the preposition IN for a specific year and OVER for a period.
3. What I was trying to make correction to is the verb GENERATED following FUEL SOURCES. It would be grammatically correct to write ‘fuel sources that generated / generating electricity’. PRODUCED is just a suggestion for a synonym.
Feel free to leave a comment.
Hi there,
Thanks for your feedback. Regarding your question, please see below:
1. According to OALD, GRAPH describes ‘a planned drawing, consisting of A LINE OR LINES, showing how two or more sets of numbers are related to each other’.
Although a GRAPH is used every now and then to paraphrase a CHART or a DIAGRAM , it is my suggestion that you use the word with its correct meaning.2. It is okay to use the phrase. Yet it is the norm to use the preposition IN for a specific year and OVER for a period.
3. What I was trying to make correction to is the verb GENERATED following FUEL SOURCES. It would be grammatically correct to write ‘fuel sources that generated / generating electricity’. PRODUCED is just a suggestion for a synonym.
Feel free to leave a comment.
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