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Topic: Some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Submission:
There is a school of thought that believes that the construction of boarder roads would reduce traffic jam. While, reasons can be given to justify this, I would argue that railways and subway lines are more efficient than the mentioned method.
On the one hand, there are those who assert that building a number of wider roads would solve traffic congestion. Firstly, a wide road, which has large street area, would allow a large number of vehicles to travel on that road. This would alleviate several typical traffic congestion caused by bottleneck in narrow area streets. Truong Chinh, a narrow street in Hanoi, has long been a commonplace street for traffic jam since it has very small road area. Secondly, the increase in the number of wider roads would help to reduce traffic flows at several streets in rush hours. This would contribute greatly to the mitigation of too crowed vehicles on a street.
On the other hand, I side with those who contend that railways and subway lines would be more beneficial to the cities infrastructure in term of traffic. Railway, which is well-known for an efficient public means of transport, would result in less private vehicles on the streets. Therefore, it would tremendously solve perennial problems of traffic jam. Furthermore, since trains and subway trains are centralized controlled, the possibility for congestions and accidents would be extremely low. The results not only reduce traffic flows on streets, but are safer and more convenient for local people as well.
In conclusion, although it is true that the increase in the number of wider roads would alleviate the problem of congestion, I firmly believe that the construction of train and subway lines is a durable solution for solving that problem.

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Overall, your essay is ok. To improve, you should use a wider range of grammar structures and vocabulary to avoid some repeating words/ structures. But the most important thing is that you should spend more time planning on the topic since some of your ideas are quite unclear and lacks supporting elements.

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